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The day begins when you wake up. It makes you sad sometimes. You can never tell what time of day it was. Morning or night. Light or dark. Your vision was taken away from you a couple years back. As a child, you were diagnosed with a condition called Retinis Pigmentosa. But you never thought you would go blind in the feature.

The remaining senses you have grow stronger since you can't see anymore. Feeling, tasting, and hearing especially have improved over the years.

It's always a bit of a hassle to go through your daily routine. But you have enough trust in Antonio to help you bathe and get dressed. He tells you numerous times that he doesn't mind helping you out.

*****

Earlier this morning, you two were getting ready to go out. "I can do this myself." You tell him when he draped a thin sweater over your shoulders. "Oh... okay. Sigas. " Antonio says, stepping back.

You stick your arms in the sleeves and get ready to button the front up. You run your fingertips over the buttons and holes, locating them, and try to match them. "Does it look good?" You ask when finished.

Antonio looks over at you before saying, "Ay, si! You finally got it!!" He runs over to you and hugs you tightly. You giggle. "You're so silly, Toni. "

*****

"Antonio?" You call out. You sit in the passenger seat and reach an arm out, feeling for your lover. A big, warm hand shortly clasps yours in response. "I'm right here, amor. " His familiar voice sounds. It is a beautiful sound for you to hear, the Spanish accent tinged within. A smile dances across your lips.

You're so happy; so very, very happy that Antonio stays with you. Despite all your problems and issues, he never left you hanging. That's how much he loves you. You aren't able to see, but he smiles back at you.

"Where are we going?" You question. The only thing you can ever see are clouds of blackness; blocking the bright and colorful world around you. And you fear that it's going to last for the rest of your life.

"It's a surprise." The Spaniard answers as he starts the car's engine. He uses his thumb to stroke the hand he's holding. Your hand. Then he drives off.

*****

Sounds of distant voices from people chatting and the waves roaring to the shore fills the warm, salt scented air.

The beach.

Antonio holds your hand, guiding you through the sand that feels cool under your bare feet. He sits you down in a cozy spot by the coast, the ocean's tides gently licking your toes.

You sigh. An almost sad sounding noise.

"I wish I was normal... I wish that I didn't need help with every single thing I did. I wish I could be more independent than I am now."

"But you buttoned up your own sweater today, corazón. You did it all by yourself. I didn't help you at all. I'm sure you'll learn how to do more things yourself little by little. It just takes time and practice. That's all."

"I know, you're right. But... I want to drive to new places again. See and discover new things. And most of all... I want to see you, Antonio. See you with both my eyes, and finally stop imagining what you look like. I'm sorry for the rant..."

"Ay chica! Well, you do get your point across. I'm glad you told me this. It's never a bad thing to complain every once in awhile. Just let it all out when you need to. Remember, I'll always be there for you."

"Thanks a lot, Toni. You're the best novio." You find his hand and slip yours into his. "De nada. Tú eres la major novia."

"Hey, how come you didn't wear your sunglasses today?" Your eyes are glazed with a dual film, staring straight ahead with a blank expression. "I just wanted to try a day without them. Because, why not?" You shrug. "I love you, Toni. You helped me a lot with everything."

"Ti amo mucho tambien, mi amor." Antonio leans in for a kiss he can't resist. You're caught by surprise, but you are getting used to these sudden kisses. You find that he does this often.

 

"Toni, what do you look like?" You ask him with curiosity synced in your voice.

"Want me to tell you again? Well... I have green eyes and brown hair. My skin is tanned, because I'm from España. And I am also about 5'10. Is that a good description?"

"Yes... you sound perfect."

Long moments of silence stretch by. It isn't uncomfortable, but, it is actually nice. A good silence. A silence to sit down and get lost in your thoughts.

The voices of neighboring crowds of people gradually die down. The ocean still roars away.

"I want to see again. I want to change."

*****

It is the day of your birthday. You are finally going to receive the present you wanted for so many years. Vision. Sight. The ability to see anything.

"I love you, ___________."

Antonio bends down to the level of the hospital bed. He kisses you and caresses your cheek.

"Love you back."

"Have a safe surgery."

Antonio watches the doctors take you into the operating room.

You have a smile on, listening to the sound of the bed's wheels roll against the tile floor.

~ El Fin. ♥

Before you ask, no there's not going to be a second part to this. Sorry, I don't normally do series at all. So now YOU will come up the ending!! :iconkiralaughplz:

Just kidding! :D Also, if you need help understanding the bits of Spanish I put, just tell me!

Thank you for reading! :D

*EDIT* (8/20/14) I feel kinda bad because there's only one story I really, really edited. Like it's its own thing now. XD Hope you like this new and improved version!
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karmasluck Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2015  Student General Artist
*gets out of the cart and goes through the window*
Toni: (NAME!)






























You were just on the first floor Sweatshirt - Evil Face 
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
... :iconyayspainplz:
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PeaceLuvLife Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I CLAIM THE SIGHT THAT IS RIGHTFULLY MINE AND MARRY TONI!
*mutters: now how's that for an ending, huh!?*
RAINBOW LARainbow iconRainbow iconRainbow iconRainbow iconRainbow iconRainbow icon
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Eliana89364057 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2015  New member
Well that's.....colorful
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
that's an awesome ending! :D
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PeaceLuvLife Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thx!
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SakuraDrowned Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Google google goolge will you ever learn
Sigas....i thats messed up its sige
Ti amo mucho tambien, mi amor."
Its te amo...ti amo is italian and its te amo tambien y mucho

"Ti amo 
Same as before
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SwaggerJr Featured By Owner Aug 10, 2014  Student General Artist
too cool 4 u
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconyayspainplz:
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YellowVixen Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
i am so happy i did spanish at school. i understand what he says :D and of course, if i had to make up the ending, i get my sight back, and i see him, and i fall in love with him more~
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aww! That makes me happy to hear. :heart: Spanish is awesome!
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FalcoAesalon Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
That was a great story!  With fluffy feels and yay! :iconyaychibispainplz:

I do have to say though, you may want to do your research if you decide to write about blind people again.  People with retinitis pigmentosa (aka RP) aren't completely blind; most of them still have some light perception (they are legally blind because either their central or peripheral vision is gone).  It's not something that comes on suddenly either so anyone who has it will have time to learn to live with being (mostly) blind.  The dull eyes you described would be cataracts, which can be fixed by surgical removal.  There is a surgery to help with RP, but as of now there is no "cure" surgery.
TL;DR:  en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Retini…
And... you know... blind people aren't helpless...

But I do applaud how well written this is.  Nice job!  :clap:
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PrincessVe Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
You deserve a hug. I was just going to mention that and you did so in a nice way.
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FalcoAesalon Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2015
Thank you!  I don't actually know anyone who is blind or legally blind, but it still bothers me when people don't check their facts before writing about medical conditions or misrepresent blind people as totally helpless.
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PrincessVe Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
I actually have RP, so I agree. I'm sure the rest of the blind world, and semi-blind, would agree with me. We love when people bother to read up on our conditions and be aware.  also love when people don't assume we're helpless.  *hugs you*
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FalcoAesalon Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2015
*hugs back*. Again, thank you! I'll admit it was characters like Toph Beifong from Avatar and Matt Murdock (aka Daredevil fro the Marvel universe) as well as a particularly well-written and well-researched Daredevil fanfiction (or maybe the author knew about it from experience, I'm not sure) that brought the issue to my attention and prompted me to do some more research.
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PrincessVe Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
They were actually the people I sympathised most with and before I was diagnosed, they had that effect on me too.
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FawnApple Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Anime Msn Emotion 2 Anime Msn Emotion 2 Big happycry Big happycry Yayspain - 2nd Version 
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:iconyayspainplz:
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darkflower220 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Artist
Sooooo cute! The fluffieness is over 9000! *died*
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! XD
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gab226789 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Student Writer
AHHHHH I NEED AN ENDING!!!!!!! *slams head into the wall and I hang limply crying to myself*

Spain: Don't cry mi amor~ *he pats my back*

I DON'T NEED YOUR SYMPATHY I NEED AN ENDING!!!!!!!

Spain: You know you could always just think one up like the author said~

mkaaaay........*sniffles*
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry Reader-chan. ^^;
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gab226789 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Student Writer
Spain: She's fine.....she just needs some coffee.....isn't that right?


whatever tomato bastard =_=


Spain: I should stop letting you hang out with Lovi o_o

Lovino: DON'T-A CALL ME THAT IDIOTA!!!!!
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Don't let him give you instant coffee. That s**t's nasty. >.<
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gab226789 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2014  Student Writer
ikr I hate that junk I really like fresh coffee that doesn't taste like England made it XD

England: MY COOKING ISN'T THAT BAD!!!!!!!!!

Yes it is England =_=
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
England... you know it is. America doesn't lie. XD
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gab226789 Featured By Owner Jun 29, 2014  Student Writer
England: hmmph whatever =3=.........

Don't you whatever me youngman! I'M FRICKEN MORE AWESOMER THAN YOU!!!


Prussia: I'll be zhe judge of zhat XD

shut up Prussian =_=
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TerraAreli Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
hee~...Confused (they're going to poke and slice and probe my eyes oh... Momo Kisaragi (I'm doomed) [V7] )
welp to able to see tony and the sunrise again i suppose i can get through this Coffee Break 
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yay! Slicing your eyes always helps to see better ;P
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PurpleSmokeX Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sorry for spamming!
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PurpleSmokeX Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Love, you works are amazing!
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~! Chili Anime Emoji (Snuggy hug) [V2] 
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LovelyMuffin33 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2014  Student
This is so wonderful!!! I love it!!
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~! Your icon is really cute Kao Emoji-04 (Cute) [V1] 
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5had0w-pr1nc3550102 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014
<3 it! it was so cute~
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!!
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5had0w-pr1nc3550102 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014
your welcome! it was a pleasure to read what you have written!
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, thank you so much~! Emoji31 
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5had0w-pr1nc3550102 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2014
you are most welcome! and that face is SUPER cute!
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FreckledArtist Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
La segunda parte, por favor! ;u; This was great~! >u<
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lo siento! This is only one part T__T Pero gracias!! :iconchibispainplz:
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FreckledArtist Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Aawww ;u;
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KillerKawaiiKitsune Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Professional General Artist
this... is... so... fucking... beautiful.
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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Gracias!! :iconchibispainplz:
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KillerKawaiiKitsune Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Professional General Artist
De nada ^w^
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crazyanimegirl22 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
there needs to be a sequel

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Littlesunflower17 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is only a oneshot. Sorry~!
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